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« on: June 20, 2006, 03:36:06 AM »
Description: Steve and DJ brake up again after DJ's near death expericane at a mall when Kimmy almost pushes DJ off the 3rd floor. Danny tries to help DJ out in the hospital and Joey gets touched by an angel to help him feel calm.

Chapter 1: Hello and Good Bye

DJ was at the mall with Steve on their 5 year annerversery. Kimmy was glaring at Steve in the love kind of mood and tapped Steve lightly.

"Stop it Kimmy." Steve said as he faced Kimmy. Kimmy didn't say anything. DJ shrugged and said, "Well I better go. My dad doesn't want me to be home late again." Steve put on his coat and said, "Okay. See you later Kimmy." Kimmy sighed and then saw DJ kiss Steve.

"I see what's going on! You don't want to be with me Steve!" Kimmy hollered. "Relax. Steve's my boyfriend. Get your own." DJ said calmly. "I had enough of this." Kimmy aid as she picked DJ up.

"Put her down!" Steve said nervously.

"Make me loverboy!" Kimmy said evily.

Runing through DJ's mind, she knew that somthing bad would happen. And it did. Kimmy walked over to a steal bar and put DJ over the ledge. "Wait! I can explain!" DJ sobbed. It was to late.Kimmy threw DJ off the 3rd floor and laughed as DJ tumbled down. "Are you out of your mind?" Steve asked worried. Kimmy turned around and kissed STeve.

The next day at the hospital, DJ didn't move a bit. "This is great! Just great! My daughter had a near death experiance and it's you're fault Gibbler!" Danny yelled in his phone and then hung up. Jesse walked into the room with a frown on his face and sighed deeply.

"I can't believe Gibbler would do that." Jesse said softly.

"File for a restraining order." Danny said.

"I'll do that the first thing tomorrow." Jesse said.

TO BE CONTINUED................
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« Reply #1 on: June 20, 2006, 11:28:10 AM »
omgomgomgomg!  Why would Kimmy do that!?  You've got me hooked already.  I can't wait till I can read more.  Great job.  ;D
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« Reply #2 on: June 20, 2006, 02:55:55 PM »
wow what an intense firs chapter
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« Reply #3 on: June 20, 2006, 11:59:44 PM »
Chapter 2: Where am I?

A few hours later, Joey walked into the room and sighed. Nicky and Alex walked beside Joey, carrying their toys with them at their sides. Jesse combed his hair and Danny was polishing the television. "There. That's better." he thought. "DJ's sleeping." Nicky said. "Now boys!" Jesse said as he tapped his foot.

DJ opened her eyes and looked around clueless. "Where am I?" she asked confused. Kimmy walked into the room, filled with bruises and handcuffs on her. "Oh Tanner." she said in a mean kind of way. "Don't do it Kimmy." Jesse said as he protected DJ. Kimmy shoved Jesse out of the way and stomped towards DJ. DJ's spine shrivled and suddenly some officers ran into the room and threw Kimmy onto the ground.

"Kimmy Gibbler! You have the right to remain silent!" the officer said. Kimmy quickly picked DJ up and threw her out the window from the 10th floor!!! "She can fly." Alex said as he tried to jump off the 10th floor. Jesse grabbed Alex and gave him to Danny. The officers tackled Kimmy and the officers dived after DJ.

The drama didn't end. When DJ actually woke up, she saw Kimmy and Steve kissing. "Isn't this great? It's our 3 year annerversery." Steve said. "Steve? What are you doing? Take your hands off her." DJ demanded. Steve faced DJ and said, "Oh my God. I'm sorry. I must have the wrong room." DJ had a worried look on her face and screamed.
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"Some dont believe he ever existed, but that isnt true. He was here, and he was real. The real question is what was he, and why was he here. Many rumors speculate as to what he was. Some believe he was some kind of demon worm creature who would pose as a librarian. Others believed he was an angel sent to spread the word of god. The truth is, I dont know what he was. All I know is what he taught me. Love, friendship, and what it means to truly live. Some call him a monster, something children are terrified by. I only know him by what he called himself. Weird 4." - nicest comment ever!

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« Reply #4 on: June 21, 2006, 12:28:29 AM »
The story seems a little rushed and the ending kinda confused me..but overall its pretty good.
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« Reply #5 on: June 21, 2006, 05:22:11 PM »
The ending is a bit confusing but it's a good idea. Maybe try slowing it down a bit and work out the little details.
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« Reply #6 on: June 21, 2006, 08:04:39 PM »
Well the ending was mainly a dream DJ had when she was in the hospital.
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« Reply #7 on: June 22, 2006, 02:03:59 PM »
Ok thats what I thought.  But I agree with Laura, maybe you should take some more time and sort out the details.  Other than that the story is great and I can't wait till I can read more.  This story is so addicting.
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« Reply #8 on: June 22, 2006, 08:13:14 PM »
no NO NO offense,but the story has kinda bored me out.i dont think ill read mor eof it..sry...its just SO unrealistic tht it has lost my intrest.it couldnt REALLY happen.im so sorry but i had 2 say tht
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« Reply #9 on: June 22, 2006, 09:05:19 PM »
Chapter 3: Touched by an Angel

DJ's leg was bouncing up and down and Danny ran into the room and asked, "Hey Deej. Are you okay? Do you need Joey? Jesse? Stephanie? Michelle? Commet? Yogi Bear? Gia? Want an ice cream? I know you like mint chocolate chip but I'll make a fuss at baskin robbins and see if I can make a fuss with them..Ya know."

DJ then fainted. Danny looked at DJ and chuckled and said, "Okay Deej. I let you sleep. Oh. Deej? You ok? You want a soda?" A doctor rushed in the room and looked at the line on the monitor. "My god she had a heart attack cause of the dream she had in the past hour." Joey walked into the room with a donut in his mouth and looked at the monitor. The food fell out his mouth.

"Hey Deej. You ok? Wake up sleepy head." Joey said sadly.

An angel appeared in the room. It was DJ as an angel. Joey looked at the DJ angel and tried to hug her. It worked. Joey could feel the DJ angel. Joey had a huge smile on his face. "Deej." he said quietly. Angel DJ smiled and waved at Joey and said, "Come with me Joey. I have somthing to show you." "Show me?" But...the long line." Joey said nervous.

"It's all right. It's called playing dead." angel DJ said.

Joey smiled and grabbed angel DJ's hand and took off in mid air.

TO BE CONTINUED.........
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« Reply #10 on: June 23, 2006, 12:25:21 AM »
I guess it was ok but I thought it was kinda silly, its just that I'm a Buddhist and I don't believe in that stuff.  Don't get me wrong it was great it just kinda seems silly to me.  I like the way Danny was asking her all those questions.  lol I can't wait till I can read more.
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« Reply #11 on: June 23, 2006, 12:52:39 AM »
Well if ya know family guy, then you'd understand the tone Danny was using. Cause every few seconds, his voice would go higher.
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« Reply #12 on: June 24, 2006, 03:26:47 PM »
be nice 2 weirdo AJ
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« Reply #13 on: June 25, 2006, 01:41:47 AM »
Chapter 4: Past

With a blink of an eye, Joey and Angel DJ appeared when DJ was first born. Pam was grunting loudly as Joey who was outside was eating a jelly donut. Angel DJ put Joey on the floor and pointed at the past DJ.

"See this Joey?" Angel DJ questioned. Joey looked at his past self and said, "Yeah. I had long hair back then."Angel DJ sighed and said, "No. Me being born. Look at mom. Remember what you wanted to name me?"

Joey's past self thought to himself, "I hope Cinderella is doing ok." "Oh yeah." Joey said. A bright light brightened the room and Joey and Angel DJ appeared in the room after DJ was born. Past Joey walked into the room and said, "Oh good. You named it Cinderella." Pam gave Joey a weird look and said, "It's DJ." Past Danny stood up and said, "Uh...Joey. Hate to say this but Cinderella is a cartoon which you watch a lot!"

"Well sorry!" Past Joey complained.

Past Danny and Joey walked into the room and Jesse hugged Pam. Past Joey didn't say much and said, "Ewww...." Past Jesse stared at past Joey and covered her mouth and laughed. Past Joey also laughed. "You did great Pam." past Danny  said and hugged Pam tightly. Joey glared down at past DJ and sobbed a little. Then the bright light surrounded the room and angel DJ and Joey left.

TO BE CONTINUED..........
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"Some dont believe he ever existed, but that isnt true. He was here, and he was real. The real question is what was he, and why was he here. Many rumors speculate as to what he was. Some believe he was some kind of demon worm creature who would pose as a librarian. Others believed he was an angel sent to spread the word of god. The truth is, I dont know what he was. All I know is what he taught me. Love, friendship, and what it means to truly live. Some call him a monster, something children are terrified by. I only know him by what he called himself. Weird 4." - nicest comment ever!

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« Reply #14 on: June 25, 2006, 03:08:27 AM »
Stephanie wasn't born when DJ was, or she would'ce been older. And I remember in one episode Joey saying that Danny and Pam wanted to name DJ Farrah (something like that) but Joey talked them out of it? I hope you don't take this the wrong way, unless I'm reading it different, I'm just trying to help you make the fanfic make more sense  :)
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