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« Reply #15 on: June 12, 2007, 03:32:05 AM »
The cliffhangers aren't too good, though I'm pretty sure that's pretty much out of your control. Good job though, I'll be looking out for it.  ;)

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« Reply #16 on: June 12, 2007, 05:17:35 AM »
Hey everyone! My dream was really incomplete and left me alot of holes for my brilliant mind to fill. lol. I did, however, tonight come up with a plot that will perfectly fill this story. I just wanted to warn u, this story has turned PG-13 for violence related things. It also gets pretty unrealistic. an example is that Brazil hates the United States, which we all know is untrue. I'm just letting you all know, but it is a great story and it is FICTION! I think you'll all like it alot!
Bekah

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« Reply #17 on: June 12, 2007, 09:51:16 PM »
I like an unreal fanfic every now and then.
I'm back

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« Reply #18 on: June 17, 2007, 02:58:36 AM »
i cant wait to read more, bekah! it sounds great so far!

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« Reply #19 on: August 04, 2007, 12:20:48 AM »
Hey I'm so sorry! I have been gone all summer! Well the only two weeks i was back my laptop hard drive failed so i had to get a new one. Anyway thanks for all the comments and i promise i'll write more soon!

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« Reply #20 on: August 04, 2007, 01:13:39 AM »
Cool I can't wait to read more

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« Reply #21 on: August 15, 2007, 09:49:35 PM »
Hey guys! i'm totally gonna finish this story starting in SEPTEMBER! i'm sooooo busy right now and when school starts i do better with time lol this is my time to do NOTHING! even though school already has me going on and on with books and reports ....all BEFORE school! lol anyway thanks for being so patient!!

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« Reply #22 on: August 16, 2007, 02:16:51 PM »
I can't wait to read the rest. It is  really good so far.

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« Reply #23 on: August 18, 2007, 02:22:37 AM »
Thanks I guess I'll continue now....
*its not september but whatever*
I've decided this is a Full House Movie...
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*We find Becky and Jesse in their room after putting the twins to bed*
Becky: Jess, I have something to tell you, but I'm not sure how to say it.
Jesse: Hunny, whatever it is just tell me...unless you found a grey hair, and in that case make something else up.
Becky: no Jesse its not that. Its just that today in the airport, when I was in the bathroom, I over heard this guy in the stall next to me. Its kinda weird but I'm sure it was a guys voice. I don't know why there would be a guy in the girls bathroom but I dont think that part matters. All that matters is that this guy said that he'd successfully followed the family into the U.S. and snuck the bomb past the metal detectors.
Jesse: What!
Becky: I don't know.  I'm so confused! But all I know is that this doesnt sound good.
Jesse: You're right Beck. Did you hear anymore details?
Becky: only that they'd keep a low profile and be ready when the time came.
Jesse: Maybe we should report this to the airport security?
Becky: Good idea Jess, but I'd rather not. I dont know very much so they would be just as confused as I am!
Jesse: Alright dont worry hunny. I'll talk to Danny tonight and see if he can figure anything out.
Becky: Thanks, Jess
*they kiss*
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(we find Megan and DJ upstairs in DJ's room)
DJ: So Megan, How did you like Dirty Dancing?
Megan: It was great! *megans smile fades*
DJ: whats wrong?
Megan: I was just thinking about my friends.
DJ: well whats been going on?
Megan: Its a really long story. I don't know why they hate me so much, like  they wont even talk to me anymore.
DJ: I'm really sorry, but can you tell me what you do know?
Megan: yeah. well It all started last year. My parents got divorced. I dont even know what happend. My parents used to be so close. Then one day, my dad came home from work and went into the room to talk to my mom. Pretty soon, I heard yelling, I couldn't make out what they were saying but it didn't sound good. (she pauses and thinks) I don't know. I overheard some of it, but I had to act like everything was ok so Kamiley and Aaron wouldnt be scared or too upset. So I took them outside to play. Later that night my parents were still fighting. They wouldnt even sleep in the same room together. The next day the filed for divorce. My friends heard about it and were comforting me. My mom told me we had to leave, that Dad didn't want us there. I couldnt believe her, I mean he had always been a great dad. *megan pauses*
DJ: aww Meg I'm so sorry!
*they hug*
Megan: (continuing) When my friends found out we were leaving Brazil, they stopped talking to me. Apparently they knew more than I did about what was going on. I still don't even really know whats going on. Thats it...then we came out here to check out San Fransisco they havent talked to me since the day I told them I was moving. Some friends they turned out to be. *starts crying*
(DJ hugs her)
DJ: Its gonna be ok. If you do move to San Fransisco then you'll have a million great friends here!
Megan: thanks deej, I hope you're right! But I'd still like to know why they've been acting so weird...
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(Its the next morning and Aaron, Stephanie, DJ, and Megan are on bus on the way downtown to see the Exploratorium and see Fishermans Wharf.)
DJ: So guys are you ready to have a great day?
Megan, Steph, and Aaron: Yeah!
Steph: Its so cool how dad let us come downtown by ourselves!
DJ: thats why me and Meg have to keep a really close watch on you two.
Aaron: we'd be fine even if you weren't here!
Steph: Yeah Deej. We're mature sophisticated pre teens.
*DJ, Megan, and Aaron laugh*
Megan: Alright, whatever guys, lets just have fun today and not argue ok?
Steph, and Aaron: Ok
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(We find Joey, Susan and Danny in the living room)
Joey: Danny, I can't believe you let the girls in downtown San Fransisco by themselves!
Danny: Joey, you know them. They are very mature and responsible and very good kids. They'll be fine.
Susan: Yeah, Megan and Aaron are used to looking out for themselves anyway.
Joey: yeah but I can just imagine everything that could happen.
Susan: its alright Joey. Its every parents worry, but we've had bigger problems lately.
Danny: Like what?
Susan: Well...maybe I should sit down and tell you guys. But this might take awhile.
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Hey...I've gotta make dinner! I'll write more soon!
ily all!

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« Reply #24 on: August 18, 2007, 02:51:44 AM »
This is really good Bekah!! Nice plot. Can't wait to read more

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« Reply #25 on: August 19, 2007, 10:42:00 PM »
Hey, that's really good! Can't wait to read more!

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« Reply #26 on: August 21, 2007, 06:50:57 AM »
Thanks! I'll write more probably Thursday after I register for school!