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No More Braids
« on: July 29, 2007, 05:21:36 AM »
Still bored.  New fanfic.  Haven't wrote one in a while.

No More Braids

My mommy always put my hair in braids every morning, if there was school, or if there wasn?t school.  She would tie my braids with 2 pink ribbons.  But after one day, my hair was never in braids again.  And they weren?t tied with pink ribbons.   I was kind of young to realize what happened at first, but I caught on very soon.  


It was morning before school.  Mommy put my hair in the two braids and tied them with the two pink ribbons, even though it didn?t match what I was wearing because I was wearing a green jumper.   At 7:50, my big sister, DJ, and I grabbed our backpacks and got in the back seat of our car.  Then Mommy got in the car and drove us to school.  She was telling us that we were going on a small road trip this weekend.  We really didn?t know where we were going yet.  

5 minutes later, at 7:55, Mommy pulled up at our school and we kissed her good-bye and ran inside the school.  Since DJ was older than me, 5th grade, she went to a class farther away from mine.  I was in kindergarten.  When I walked into my classroom, I put my backpack away and sat down next to a boy named Harry.  He was my best friend, he was my only friend.  My only friend.


At 8:15, the bell rang and we all stood up and said The Pledge of Allegiance.  Then we sat down and my teacher read us a story called ?Green Eggs and Ham.?  I?ve never heard that story before, and it was really funny!  Harry and I were laughing out loud, along with the rest of the class.

The story was over at 8:30.  Then we started working on math.  Our teacher was teaching us how to add.  I learned some new addition problems that day.  I learned how to add my 2s.  Like 1+2, 2+2, 3+2, and stuff like that.  She said next week we were going to work on subtraction.  

At 9:00, it was music class.  I was playing the recorder.  Harry was playing the guitar.  He was really good!  He taught me a chord, and I taught him how to play my recorder.  The whole class played together.  It was so much fun!

Music class was over at 9:30.  The class walked back to the classroom.   Then it was snack time.  I was drinking a carton of milk and eating some crackers, when the office called the classroom and told me to come to the office.  The teacher sent me down.  

When I got to the office, DJ was sitting in a chair waiting for me.  Daddy was standing next to her, with a sad face.  He didn?t tell me anything, and DJ didn?t know what was wrong either.   DJ and I had to leave school early with Daddy.  He drove us to the local hospital, and DJ started crying.  I didn?t know why.  Maybe she thought something happened to a family member.  A close family member.  

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« Reply #1 on: July 30, 2007, 12:23:29 AM »
Wow, so far that's REALLY good.

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« Reply #2 on: July 30, 2007, 03:34:31 AM »
Thank you, and here's more.  I would of made more last night but I wrote that at like midnight and I was tierd and bored and out of ideas.  But since it's like just past 9:30, I'll be writing all night lol.

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Daddy opened the door going into the waiting room.  I ran up and hugged my Uncle Jesse ad DJ hugged Daddy's best friend, Joey.  We sat there for about 30 minutes, but it seemed a lot longer. A LOT longer.  

The doctor came out into the waiting room.  DJ and I still didn't know what was going on until the doctor took me and my sister into a hospital room.  I couldn't believe what I saw.  DJ started sobbing.  So did I.  

What we saw was Mommy laying in a hospital bed, white as a ghost, covered in bandages and wraps on her head.  There was all these tubes that helped her breathe.  I ran up to her, but I was too afraid to give her a hug.  But I wanted to hug her so badly.  She needed it.  I knew she did, and I regret not giving her one.  And I will always regret it.  

The doctors told me and DJ that Mommy got in a car crash after she dropped us off at school.  They didn't know if she would make it.  I didn't know what they meant by "making it," so I asked Daddy, and he said they don't know if she will die or not.  My mommy could die.  

DJ and I were still in her hospital room.  Mommy couldn't talk, but she knew we were there.  But suddenly, a machine started beeping and all these doctors rushed into the room.  The nurse took us out of the room.  I started screaming and crying for my mommy, trying to get back in the room so I could see her again.  But the nurse pulled me away, no matter how hard I tried to get back.  I was scared.  So was DJ.  

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A few minutes later, a doctor came out in the waiting room.  She pulled Daddy aside and started talking to him.  Daddy looked up at the celing and fell to the ground on his knees.  "WHY!  WHY!" he sobbed.  DJ knew what happened.  I didn't.  

DJ told me what happened to Mommy.  She said that she didn't make it.  She died.  She won't tuck me in anymore.  She won't hug or kiss me anymore.  She won't take me to school or pack my lunch.  She won't put two braids in my hair anymore and tie them with two pink ribbons.  No more braids.  

DJ started screaming and crying, and ran into Uncle Jesse's arms, who was also crying.  Uncle Jesse never ever cries.  I ran and hugged Joey.  He wasn't crying.  I didn't know why he wasn't crying, so I asked him.  He said that he wanted to be a big boy and not cry.  But I told him Mommy would want him to cry.  I think when I said that, it made him cry.  

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That night as I layed in my bed, I felt like there I was nothing.  I felt like an empty person. I felt cold and I felt that I had no one to be with.  I felt alone and scared.  I felt as if I was going to die that second.  I didn't feel alive.  But Mommy would want me to fall asleep.  So I did.  



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« Reply #3 on: July 30, 2007, 05:47:24 PM »
That's really good, I just want to point out that Steph could not yet be in kindergarten and DJ in 5th grade because they didn't enter those grades until The First Day of School, which was at least a couple of months after Pam died.







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« Reply #4 on: July 30, 2007, 11:30:29 PM »
Yeah Mikaylis right but its still really good.

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« Reply #5 on: July 31, 2007, 03:33:49 AM »
Ehh I was tierd and I wasn't thinking... I'm usually really good with that stuff, or I used to be when I was like die-hard obsessed with FH.  And I still don't know where I'm gonna put Michelle lol.  Maybe I'll just screw her lol.  I dunno.

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« Reply #6 on: August 01, 2007, 04:30:55 AM »
She was very young at the time, so she probably wouldn't have much of a part, lol.  THe story is quite interesting although, I've read a lot of the Pam death stories that the novelty has worn off of it.


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« Reply #7 on: August 01, 2007, 11:33:04 PM »
Yeah there really is no place for Michelle just because she is still very young and can't talk so its hard to find a place for her. But I agree with fhf on stories about Pam's Death

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« Reply #8 on: August 02, 2007, 02:18:34 AM »
This is one of the best fanfics I have ever read, its very much in character and the title is amazing.
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« Reply #9 on: August 02, 2007, 01:59:03 PM »
That was good fhfreak i really enjoyed reading it. The whole time I was reading it I was thinking how is Michelle going to fall into the story but now I relize that there dosen't seem to be a need to put her in because she would'nt say much anyway.
great story though.

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« Reply #10 on: August 02, 2007, 02:55:33 PM »
I think I might have her at her grandma's house or something, because she's probably too young to go to day care... and since Jesse and Joey work they can't watch her (I think Joey works then...)

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« Reply #11 on: August 02, 2007, 04:45:34 PM »
Ya that seems to be the best way to have things.


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« Reply #12 on: August 02, 2007, 09:27:11 PM »
I got more now:

It was 6:30 in the morning when I woke up.  I ran in the kitchen to hug Mommy.  But she wasn't there like she was every morning drinking her coffee and reading the paper with Daddy.  She is dead.  

Daddy was in the kitchen looking at Mommy's favorite coffee mug.  He wasn't drinking any coffee and he wasn't reading the paper.  I asked him if I still had to go to school today.  He said I won't be going to school for a long time probably.  Since it was the end of the school year, I may never be going to school again.  

DJ woke up by the sound of Michelle's cry.  I ran up to Michelle's room to calm her down.  So did DJ.  We knew that Michelle knew that there was something wrong.  Because she said her first word.  "Mama."  

We ran downstairs to get Daddy.  We told him that Michelle said her first word, and he ran upstairs again with us.  She said "mama" again.  

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Sorry it's so short, I'm dead out of ideas.

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« Reply #13 on: August 03, 2007, 12:58:48 AM »
But I do enjoy your point of view/perspective idea.  Kind of brings in some insight into the character.  You're a good writer, fhfreak.  :)


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« Reply #14 on: August 03, 2007, 05:00:15 PM »
Its interesting to me to read about what life was like for the Tanners right after Pam died.

Great Story fhfreak.